ok, from feedback given today, I think I know what I did wrong. I tried to make it sad! damn pokemon dying giving me wrong ideas. it has to be funny until the end. half-funny/half-sad at the same time = half-crap.
will think about reintroducing treadmill, as some peers said that was funny. hmmm nobody noticed the disappearance of the pigeons so obviously they were not main to the story! yay
ok, from feedback given today, I think I know what I did wrong. I tried to make it sad! damn pokemon dying giving me wrong ideas. it has to be funny until the end. half-funny/half-sad at the same time = half-crap.
ReplyDeletewill think about reintroducing treadmill, as some peers said that was funny. hmmm
nobody noticed the disappearance of the pigeons so obviously they were not main to the story! yay